Rugged overused bottom
Now unable to stand
Satisfied lying horizontal
Water still left on insides
Ready to quench anyone
Who holds onto its familiar body,
Now
Marked by faded pictures
And a half visible sign
Yellow reflecting rays, now
Turned dull tired pale
Still complements little round
Full of dents silver head
Loses weight when someone’s filled
And gains ready to fill again,
With more and more sips
Grows it’s serving strife
Until insides crack
Unable to hold life.
I tried to write a imagist poem for the first time. Imagism was a movement in early-20th-century Anglo-American poetry that favored precision of imagery and clear, sharp language. So I did it with a still life. Any suggestions or feedback are most welcome and appreciated!!
I never read a poem in this view!
I loved it Christin!❤️
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Thanks a lot friend! Glad you liked it.
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Projecting a unexpected object with great depth is a good effort. Good one appreciate your thoughts.🙋♂️👌
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I wanted to try something different. Thank you for your appreciation 🙏
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I like the concept . Good try. You can always be different than stereotypical writings that makes your pen very special. Good luck. Happy sunday .
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I’m glad you liked it. Your Feedback means a lot, thanks smile.
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👌🍀🙏⚘
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Hahaha poem on water bottle,😅😅
Really well apt..😊😊
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I tried my best😁 thanks dvyang.
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Nice poem n the much less used topic. Well done👌👍
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Thank you, it was a great experience for me too.
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Wonderfully written!!
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Thanks a lot!!
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Yeah the imagism is simply amazing..keep writing ✍️
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Thanks Anu. Glad you liked it.💫
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Wow!!! Very well penned ✍️ loved the different view and thought !!!
Don’t forget to Glee and spread Sparkles ✨
-Nani 💖
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Thanks for your wonderful comment Nani.🙏💫
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My pleasure 🥰💖🤗
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A nice concept, loved the poem 😊
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Thanks for your feedback.😊🙏
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Das Innerste
bricht nicht auseinander
solange die
Haut gut gepflegt
das Herz
mit den Händen
zusammen arbeitet
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The harmony between the heart and hands working together, I will keep that in mind. Thank you reading🙏 and your valuable feedback.
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Beautiful poem. Very descriptive and well written. Take care.
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Thank you for reading and your kind words.💫
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I read this poem at a different frequency….that water bottle can be a human as well….beautifully written Christin
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I’m glad you liked it. Non living things assume the person’s perception who describes them. Thanks for your feedback.
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It’s my pleasure….Great writing it is
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Loved this 👏👏
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Thank you. Happy you liked it.💫
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🤗🤓😊
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Loved it the way you connected two things together and made it so meaningful!!
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Loved something so fresh!
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Thank you!! Long time, how are you doing?
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